Pirate Mike’s Son Focuses!

I love, love, love how the characters look here. Billy needs hair on the side of his head, but I love the expressions. I also like Billy’s schpiel in the second panel. But, again, what to do in that third panel? Can I pull the rabbit out of the hat there? Meh. Maybe? The finish hasn’t really even been hinted at and I don’t think it’s a good payoff. I think if I could have done something other than baseball, something more father and son oriented, maybe it would have worked. I still like the strip, but it’s this kind of writing issues I’m hoping to address more effectively in the future.

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